So enough of sales for a moment: what about other types of proposal? Consider the following, if you will:
“Hola! You’re very pretty! God, I realy luv beautiful hot cuties like u!”
How’s it going?
Your profile is really fascinating. I noticed that you mention pretty much all of the things I enjoy. That’s awesome! It’s nice that you love literature and movies; LOL I’m curious what your favourites might be, although I’m guessing that you have good taste.
PS I’d like to apologise for the fact I’m a bit of an awkward atheist. Sorry! But I am a vegetarian, and I did get some tattoos when I was in a metal band whilst studying physics at grad school, ha ha!
- Netspeak, bad grammar, and bad spelling are huge turn-offs. (But hey, we don’t need trained proofreaders to check our sales proposals, do we??)
- People normally like compliments, but when they’re used as pick-up lines, before you’ve even met in person, they inevitably feel…ew. (“You’re such a wonderful organisation, and we’d love to work with you on this truly exciting project…”?)
- The way you choose to start your initial message to someone is the “first impression of your first impression.” (See various entries here on Executive Summaries!)
- Even more effective are phrases that engage the reader’s own interests, or show you’ve read their profile. (Profile = RFP!)
- Be careful not to let the appearance of vulnerability become the appearance of sweaty desperation: please is on the negative list (“Thank you so much for inviting us to bid for this contract…”?)
I wonder if proposal folks are particularly skilled at dating?!