I was working recently on a project with Graham Ablett (one of our fellow Directors in Strategic Proposals) on a project to edit and sharpen a client’s pre-written proposal content. A few of the lines in the raw material provided to us were particularly bizarre.
- “The core list of products in PRICING represents WHATEVER IT REPRESENTS and is not a comprehensive list of products.” (What???)
- “During contract implementation, you will receive fluid communication from your business development manager.” (I don’t think I want to know any more!)
- If there’s a problem with deliveries, they’ll advise the relevant warehouse who will make certain “that the correct quantity of product is stored to ensure further disruption”. (Ensure??!!).